tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post2176459982434355014..comments2024-03-15T14:23:29.857+07:00Comments on Yukkuri Free Time Literature Service: Our New World - Chapter 2 Part 13Yukkuri Oniisanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09604990645032069309noreply@blogger.comBlogger53125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-39278784760236229822017-11-21T21:04:27.718+07:002017-11-21T21:04:27.718+07:00um..its not like they're bulldozing their way ...um..its not like they're bulldozing their way through..<br />tho i wouldn't mind if they did,i mean they're the ones who got invaded for the past 600 years(2 yrs for NS tho). so if anything,they have every right to obliterate them for revenge,especially the perpetrators of invasion and their descendants. personally i want them to do that,then leave the remaining people on their own later w/o taking over their administration just for the chaos and a lil despair.<br />(yes i'm a petty creature)<br />ofc kemomimi slaves will be spared and be loved instead.<br />well..though i say this,NS being NS i doubt they would do that,unless its necessary (fu..fufu).<br /><br />i'm quite worried about yuuto though,someone has to tell him how valuable those dresses/potions etc. are for the people of neuwelt..and it would be bad (i dunno how,i just feel that it would be bad) if he keeps on giving those left and right FOR FREE. Ichiko,Stella,Kiyomi are enough for common sense breakerAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-89031113678340598452017-04-16T11:04:36.323+07:002017-04-16T11:04:36.323+07:00Hmm, Thalassian language is it? Are you sure they&...Hmm, Thalassian language is it? Are you sure they're humans, and not the high/blood elves of Azeroth (WarCraft universe)? Thalassian is the native ingame language for the Sindorei there...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-75460411032425606822016-08-19T00:50:05.588+07:002016-08-19T00:50:05.588+07:00Just ignore him and donate! You will motivate Yukk...Just ignore him and donate! You will motivate Yukkuri to write more :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00069068128427943175noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-22455206178437565382016-08-17T10:08:05.646+07:002016-08-17T10:08:05.646+07:00Superfluous part is fine, I like reading them. How...Superfluous part is fine, I like reading them. However, it just that that was a bad timing. We were reading about Mayana and the villagers discussed and decided to meet and negotiate with Yusis. The tone were serious. And we were anticipating what will happend next.<br /><br />Then we were greeted with a scene of girls playing kya~ kya~. It totally broke the mood. It was serious just a few lines above.<br /><br />It's like a commercial break at a cliffhanger. But unlike comercial break which forced you to wait in anticipation and is not a part of the show, this is a part of the story I wish I could skip it and get to the meeting. But I can't. I can't because I fear I might miss something.<br /><br />Then I found out that there is nothing to miss. Everything I learn from the scene, their personality and quirks are already known. The scene does convey the contrast in the mood between the two sides, but that's nothing that cannot be tell with a couple of sentences.<br /><br />Even if it does break the mood, I would appreciate it if it tells us something new or something important. Maybe breaking the mood was the point.<br /><br />But this break doesn't build up my anticipation, doesn't tell me anything new. It just break the flow of the story.<br /><br />There are many stories which suddenly switch scene at a cliffhanger to another unrelated scene or a scene happening in parallel and sucessfully build up my interest. I would groan and curse of the cliffhanger but hey, this another scene is also interesting and/or meaningful then they would switch around and around and I would end up hooked, wanting to read both.<br /><br />I feel like I'm coming out too damn harsh. I really do enjoy this work. I check your site everyday to check if this is updated. (Also because it doesn't show on novelupdate). But I also criticize it because I just fucking love it.<br /><br />PS: I love Stella. She is my favorite. I love to see her slip out to have serious talk with Yusis then go back to play with the younger girls like: "Hey girls, there is nothing to worry about. Big sis is here. Let's play." while also knows, thinking and worrying about the situation herself.BLKCandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06922111252078601670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-15870806877862550672016-08-16T23:04:53.002+07:002016-08-16T23:04:53.002+07:00Thanks for the reply, thought the title [The Diffe...Thanks for the reply, thought the title [The Difference between "God" and "Human"] meant it was a sarcastic one from Yusis POV. Should you get yourself a proper editor you could release it as a complete book online. <br /><br />Can not wait for more of your fiction being released.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18358639206193375490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-54067118724545822502016-08-16T16:45:46.989+07:002016-08-16T16:45:46.989+07:00I wish to ask you if the fact that Yusis and the h...I wish to ask you if the fact that Yusis and the harem are considered demi-gods will come into play, and how come no one let this fact slip to the natives considering one of them at least already committed blasphemy(stabbing) or failed to give proper reverence(woman and children free attitude)?<br /><br />See one planned chapter that have really weird title? It's the "reveal" chapter :PYukkuri Oniisanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09604990645032069309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-86686556281735979542016-08-16T16:43:55.637+07:002016-08-16T16:43:55.637+07:00I think you have an astute insight...
Anyway, I l...I think you have an astute insight...<br /><br />Anyway, I love to write the girls (especially Saki and Stella) weird lines. So that superfluous part is indeed superfluous. Just think of it as commercial break. After all this story actually began as CGDCT genre...<br /><br />Now about the character. Thank you for your criticism and suggestion. You're observation is quite point on the character quirks. It's quite frightening how you are guessing the plot... though... (although some of the planned chapters deviate from what you had written)<br />I think you have talent for writing... or observation...<br /><br />At the end:<br />Thank you for reading and writing your impression of them. As an author I am happy someone noticed the character in the direction of the impression that I want the character have on the reader.Yukkuri Oniisanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09604990645032069309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-63450688263531330882016-08-16T03:12:16.657+07:002016-08-16T03:12:16.657+07:00Yukkuri Onii-san, your novel is the most waited fo...Yukkuri Onii-san, your novel is the most waited for text along with Realist out of all your works so keep up the good work! <br /><br />I wish to ask you if the fact that Yusis and the harem are considered demi-gods will come into play, and how come no one let this fact slip to the natives considering one of them at least already committed blasphemy(stabbing) or failed to give proper reverence(woman and children free attitude)?<br />Is you mentioning Yusis in future as Yusis the Great implies he will be viewed as a human conquerer and not a god? <br /> <br />P.S. While I can not find any Archduchy Union, A Grand Duchy of Lithuania did exist in Europe and in fact was one of the biggest nations of the time.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18358639206193375490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-28630908068522454182016-08-16T00:04:13.187+07:002016-08-16T00:04:13.187+07:00Now, the worst are the twins.
What are their role...Now, the worst are the twins.<br /><br />What are their role? They are not combatants, nor supports. They are not trying to refine their combat skill, their 'help' in the office is only minimal. It's like they were just placed their because they cannot do anything else.<br /><br />In they first arc, the twins serve a purpose to show the insecurity of being teleported to the new world. But now, what do they do other than acting as supposedly cute spoiled little sisters?<br /><br />No one should expected them to be able to do much, but they should be aware of that fact, and they should try to learn to do more. Or at least, others should try to help them do more.<br /><br />Just, give them something to do, really.BLKCandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06922111252078601670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-54236626165558118882016-08-15T23:54:21.393+07:002016-08-15T23:54:21.393+07:00Chie, well she is decent, need more 'screen ti...Chie, well she is decent, need more 'screen time' to judge her though.<br /><br />Chie is established as an elite warrior with quiet personality. It is enough for her to just keep up with her training and be prepared for combat, that is her role. <br /><br />Better if she could find her own purpose on what she should do other than just training though. Like training the knights or improving the sword art or something.<br /><br />As for Saki, she should just focused on training right now, which she kind of did. She fool around a bit too much, but that's fine. That's just her personality. She should realize the responsibility of her role soon though. She cannot just play around, she is a demigod duchess.BLKCandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06922111252078601670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-3624050565209366672016-08-15T23:42:20.970+07:002016-08-15T23:42:20.970+07:00Kiyomi's ability is being helpful, but her per...Kiyomi's ability is being helpful, but her personality is bland borderline yandere devoted wife character with nothing but 'this is the waifu'. She is playing wife, she is being nothing but Yusis wife that's all.<br /><br />I cannot see her as 'Kiyomi'. I can only see her as that Yusis yan wife girl.<br /><br />To fix this, I believe you should show some of her feeling, her problems, or has her actively do something for Neuschwanensee and get a bit away from Yusis. Give her a life other than Yusis.<br /><br />Like right now, you can have her actively work as an ambassador instead of just being an interpreter for this one time. <br /><br />And better if you have her volunteer for the position, showing that she is not just a girl blinded by her love of Yusis, but also understand what is important and what are her worth and roles.BLKCandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06922111252078601670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-18598831657039552482016-08-15T23:36:51.360+07:002016-08-15T23:36:51.360+07:00It is hard to love the girls who are not actively ...It is hard to love the girls who are not actively providing anything and yet fooling around. <br /><br />Really, right now only girls I can honestly like and respect are Una and Stella. They made themselves useful and have likable character/personality.<br /><br />Dependable Una onee-san pretty much handling the economy, a playful with a hidden side of seriousness Stella-san taking care of younger girls and researching her magic.<br /><br />I will go over other girls one by one.BLKCandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06922111252078601670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-20015753057611856752016-08-15T23:34:24.465+07:002016-08-15T23:34:24.465+07:00The girls are turning annoying. You already establ...The girls are turning annoying. You already established their personality. You already show how 'relaxed' they are with them playing young noble girl games. You can now just skip these parts, just briefly mention them if you belive it is important. (Which it is important for showing how relaxed they are, but we just have to know they are really relaxed, not how they play right?) By describing these scenes, you are repeatingly tell us that they, despite were 'commoners' just a while ago, are no playing around like a spoiled noble girls in military camp.BLKCandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06922111252078601670noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-4160685578534949582016-08-12T10:00:33.685+07:002016-08-12T10:00:33.685+07:00Will the *ahem* yaoi fiction about Yuuto and male ...Will the *ahem* yaoi fiction about Yuuto and male version Sia be ever mentioned again?<br />Sound like a fun material for gossiping lolAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-10176298342522714802016-08-12T03:34:47.711+07:002016-08-12T03:34:47.711+07:00The way I signify different languages in my storie...The way I signify different languages in my stories is by having the text colored differently, just looks interesting and all.<br /><br />Love this story!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01883692827815242779noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-59220681522334884252016-08-10T22:09:11.614+07:002016-08-10T22:09:11.614+07:00Can player equip etc: *spoiler* this will come in ...Can player equip etc: *spoiler* this will come in play at a later chapter... (actually chapter 2-14)<br /><br />realistic reason for the all-knights-handsomeness? Well, the the leftover of the game: actual handsomeness level of NS men is above average, also those shiny Silver Armor is so damn cool.<br /><br />- And did the knights in the first to six war died forever? Resurrection had its limitation. The limitation is under the investigation led by Nisani under Yuuto's order.Yukkuri Oniisanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09604990645032069309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-10160773649383116722016-08-10T21:59:16.091+07:002016-08-10T21:59:16.091+07:00I looked forward to see how the Holy land's ci...I looked forward to see how the Holy land's citizen react to that nick-name issue. I hope that Maya would refuse calling them like that when she learned Neuchswanensee common sense. As much as she wants to get close to the players, she shouldn't ignore those obvious rules... but then she might make use of... nevermind! This is just my ramblings. *ahem* (safe...*sigh* no author want others to guess their story (right) afterall)<br />And some trivias question, please~<br />- Can the players equip things other than weapon, clothings or armors? You know...like the accessories function in game, magic tattoos, tribal body paint... make up?<br />- What is the realistic reason for the all-knights-handsomeness? Btw, I look forward to the residents reaction when they figured out their objects of romance, the Silver Knight Brigade, were actually composed of their hated demon and beast race. Oh and also because all of them are handsome just like in fairy tale... cause you know, beauty is all about the symmetrization on the face and figure. Even if some isn't suit your taste, good-looking is good looking.<br />- And did the knights in the first to six war died forever? Or are all of them revived because they got blessed and they're in a separate system just like the guardian?<br /><br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-80053320970151676182016-08-10T21:36:27.019+07:002016-08-10T21:36:27.019+07:00Ok sorryOk sorryAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18275578556059401574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-87911918946823650842016-08-10T10:48:05.157+07:002016-08-10T10:48:05.157+07:00Eh. On the flipside when overpowered protagonists ...Eh. On the flipside when overpowered protagonists bulldozes his way through everything with sheer egoism and self-righteousness without the slightest attempt to come to a mutual understanding the story could so easily devolve into masturbatory wank.<br /><br />I think Yukkuri's doing a fine job so far balancing between the importance of information and understanding the New World with Neuschwanensee asserting and expanding its own influence. Kudos really<br /><br />If anything I'm leaning a bit more on the side that felt the protagonists being too carefree with their interactions with the New World lol<br />...what with Yuuto's inventing-manufacturing-gifting spree, Ichiko's handing out resurrections like candy, Stella dropping nukes in the preview or Kiyomi summoning mythical creatures as gofers slash playmates.<br />Yeah, just a bit xDAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-20625487481349621942016-08-10T03:14:02.790+07:002016-08-10T03:14:02.790+07:00Hahaha! Ikr!! Sadly in the medieval timesn royalti...Hahaha! Ikr!! Sadly in the medieval timesn royalties and nobles have their pride to keep. They can't just overlook someone annexing their land and do nothing right? Hahaha! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-20496730351624526462016-08-10T03:09:28.056+07:002016-08-10T03:09:28.056+07:00No no no. Common sense is not fix. Everyone has th...No no no. Common sense is not fix. Everyone has their own way of common sense. So I think that Neuchwanense should just stay as it is instead of learning other people's common sense.<br /><br />Just for your info, keeping their own common sense will be good for the story. I have seen light novels where the MCs are trying to learn common sense from others and it is boring. A few examples will be "The New Gate" and "The Man Picked Up by the God". Well, I'm liking the light novels that I have mentioned so far but it can seriously become boring as the MCs are trying to blend together with the side characters. Compare it to "No Game No Life" where the MCs didn't bother to use other people's common sense. You can see the different. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-75572490580212814732016-08-10T02:54:14.921+07:002016-08-10T02:54:14.921+07:00Sorry if it sounds harsh but that's like only ...Sorry if it sounds harsh but that's like only USD $5. I'm glad that you want to "help" by donating. Sadly, that amount cannot buy Yukkuri extra time. He needs to work and feed himself as well as translating around 5 light novels. This story is only written when he has the time. <br />Maybe if you can try promoting the story to more people? Social medias like Facebook and Twitter might do the job. <br />I've been reading this work for 6 times and I'm trying to fix the grammars and spelling mistakes while I'm on it. I will rush fixing after my exams which finish at the end of this month and send it to his email. This is my way of helping out. Hopefully this can help to attract more people. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-25629410941830110942016-08-09T16:38:40.321+07:002016-08-09T16:38:40.321+07:00thx, appreciate the response
Still don't quit...thx, appreciate the response<br /><br />Still don't quite get it with them using first real name basis but I'll chalk it up to the extraordinary circumstances they're in right now. <br /><br />As for Mayana.. well just imagining Florea's ghastly face when she saw her getting all too chummy with the Heaven Lords or Maya's own reaction when she realizes just how truly literally godlike the beings she's on nickname basis are already amuses me. <br />So yeah, I like where this is going! Can't wait for the next chapter :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-65457828220170666422016-08-09T15:44:50.507+07:002016-08-09T15:44:50.507+07:00Also the reason why Kiyomi using nicknames when do...Also the reason why Kiyomi using nicknames when doing the introduction:<br />Their name were rather long and of different form from the local name. She just shortening the name for the ease of Mayana. After all, calling Duchess this Duchess that is still weird for them (none of the players are nobles).<br />In Japanese, they will be addressed as: Mel-sama.Yukkuri Oniisanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09604990645032069309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1161586047925771025.post-1991530044492391002016-08-09T15:24:34.881+07:002016-08-09T15:24:34.881+07:00Well... as far as the player concerned their nickn...Well... as far as the player concerned their nickname is their name... all that "von X zu N" is just for fun.<br />They are actually not 'meeting' each other for the first time, they are old guild mates after all:<br />Yuuto-Stella-Ichiko is common Instance Raiding team mates in the old times.<br />Yuuto-Chie is common partner in crime when field-farming, Yuuto-Kiyomi is common partner for instance-farming, since Yuuto also power leveling Kiyomi.<br />Ichiko-the Twins are also common party mates, but they also know Yuuto. After all, Yuuto is Vice-Guild Leader<br />Saki is newbie player which is under teacher-student relationship with Chie.<br />All the eight had met each others for several times already.<br />Also, it was the twins who began the trend by calling themselves nickname (Tsuu-chan, Mii-chan).<br /><br />The reason why Maya take Kiyomi offer is because she isn't sure whether this is Neuschwanensee custom or not, whether rejecting it will be impolite or not. After all unknown culture begets unknown rule.<br /><br />Perhaps I need to mention this inside the story.Yukkuri Oniisanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09604990645032069309noreply@blogger.com